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Band 4.5

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of households inowned and rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of households inowned and rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
The bar chart displays the number of rented and owned households in England and Wales from the years 1919 and 2011. In comparison, the number of households owned was the highest in 1918, with the lowest in 1991 and 2001
whereas
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 household accommodation on rental was the highest in 2001 and the lowest in 1918.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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