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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reason why this is change has happened and suggest how family could be brought together.

#families #reason #change
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ticket
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price
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 departure in 2 hours split
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the
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, it is seemingly fluctuating across
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, with the most expensive fare
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 from the other
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 slightly correlate with the
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