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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reason why this is change has happened and suggest how family could be brought together.

#families #reason #change
The chart shows
train’s
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the train’s
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ticket
price
according to
 the
passenger
 departure in 2 hours split
time
 in the peak hour per
day
. In
context
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the context
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 of
passenger
 departure, there are three peak moments in a
day
, as it sees at 8 am, 12
pm
, and 6
pm
 when
busy
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the busy
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time
 occurs.
On the contrary
, declining happens generally at 10
pm
 when
mostly
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 people already go
for
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home. Regarding
for
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the
ticket
price
, it is seemingly fluctuating across
a
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the
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day
, with the most expensive fare
happens
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happening
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 at 12
pm
 (
in
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at
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the
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apply
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lunch
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lunchtime
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time
) and the cheapest one at 6
pm
.
Overall
, the
ticket
price
 tends to be generally stable, except at 12pm and 6pm which
are distinguish
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are distinguished
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 from the other
time
. To sum it up, the
ticket
price
apparently
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is apparently
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 influenced by
total
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the total
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 of passengers in a
day
, when the
numbers
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number
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 of
passenger
 spike, so be the
price
ticket
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of ticket
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.
However
,
this
 circumstance does not happen at 6
pm
, when the train’s fare
not
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does not
did not
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 slightly correlate with the
passenger
 surge.
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