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The Charts Below Show What UK Graduate And Postgraduate Students Who Did Not Go Into Full-Time Work Did After Leaving College In 2008 Summarise The Information By Selecting And Reporting The Main Features, And Make Comparisons Where Relevant.

The Charts Below Show What UK Graduate And Postgraduate Students Who Did Not Go Into Full-Time Work Did After Leaving College In 2008 Summarise The Information By Selecting And Reporting The Main Features, And Make Comparisons Where Relevant.
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The given charts demonstrate what UK graduate and postgraduate
students
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 did having left college in 2008 excluding permanent workers.
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, both graduates and postgraduates had more tendency to go on with
further
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 study and the voluntary worker was the least common
similarly
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. Nearly 30000
students
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 who chose
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 study had outnumbered significantly their counterparts. 17735 graduates went on to work part-time and the number of
students
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 who did not get a job was nearly 1000 fewer than part-time workers. Voluntary work which reached 3500 was the least common destination among others As was in graduates, postgraduates who went on with
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 studies were the biggest and voluntary workers were the smallest groups reaching 2725 and 345 respectively.
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, more
students
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 chose to work part-time rather than
students
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 who were unemployed consisting of 2535 and 1615
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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