Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health.
It is certainly true that today
children
spend a significant amount of time in front of Television and play video
games
. I totally agree with the statement, I believe the
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apply
video
games
and TV
can have a
negative consequences on Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
children
mental Change noun form
children's
health
inculding
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including
encourage
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encouraging
children
to adopt violence
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violent
attitude
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attitudes
increase
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and increase
the
mental Correct article usage
apply
health
issues.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe that play
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playing
video
games
and watch
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watching
TV
can leads
to harmful impacts on Change the verb form
lead
mental
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the mental
health
of children
. Firtsly
, some Correct your spelling
Firstly
video
games
and TV
programs shows
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show
contents
about violent images and motivate Fix the agreement mistake
content
children
to hold guns and commite
crime. Correct your spelling
commit
For example
, the Call Of Duty is popular
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a popular
video
game among children
, this
game incentive children
to have weapons and kill police officers and teach them strategies to escape from justice. Therefore
, this
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these
games
and TV
programs can spread violent behaviour amoung
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among
children
and effect
their mental Correct your spelling
affect
health
and leads to increase
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an increase
the
rate of crime Change preposition
in the
of
minors.
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among
Secondly
, the play video
games
or watch
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watching
TV
progarms
can make Correct your spelling
programmes
children
are
more likely to develop mental Unnecessary verb
apply
health
issues namely, depression, anxiety, introvert. This
is because children
spend a considerable amount of time in front of these technology
rather than interact with their peer or their parents especially, Change the determiner
this technology
these technologies
children
on
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in
crucial
stageCorrect article usage
a crucial
,
because the brain of Remove the comma
apply
children
in phase
of development. Add an article
the phase
a phase
Furthermore
, these technology
contain electric waves ,which can Change the determiner
technologies
interefere
with Correct your spelling
interfere
growth
of Add an article
the growth
children
brain, which means they may be Change noun form
children's
children
get unkown
mental problems in future.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that Correct your spelling
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play
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playing
video
games
and watch
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watching
TV
can have adverse impacts on mental
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the mental
health
of children
namely,increase
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increased
the
violence Correct article usage
apply
as well as
depression and anxiety.Submitted by faiz3177 on
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