Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health.

It is certainly true that today
children
spend a significant amount of time in front of Television and play
video
games
. I totally agree with the statement, I believe
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video
games
and
TV
can have
a
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negative consequences on
children
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mental
health
inculding
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including
,
encourage
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children
to adopt
violence
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attitude
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,
increase
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and increase
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the
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mental
health
issues.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe that
play
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video
games
and
watch
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watching
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TV
can
leads
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to harmful impacts on
mental
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the mental
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health
of
children
.
Firtsly
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Firstly
, some
video
games
and
TV
programs
shows
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contents
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content
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about violent images and motivate
children
to hold guns and
commite
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commit
crime.
For example
, the Call Of Duty is
popular
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video
game among
children
,
this
game incentive
children
to have weapons and kill police officers and teach them strategies to escape from justice.
Therefore
,
this
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games
and
TV
programs can spread violent behaviour
amoung
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among
children
and
effect
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affect
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their mental
health
and leads to
increase
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an increase
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the
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rate of crime
of
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among
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minors.
Secondly
, the play
video
games
or
watch
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watching
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TV
progarms
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programmes
can make
children
are
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more likely to develop mental
health
issues namely, depression, anxiety, introvert.
This
is because
children
spend a considerable amount of time in front of
these technology
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rather than interact with their peer or their parents especially,
children
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crucial
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stage
,
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because the brain of
children
in
phase
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the phase
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of development.
Furthermore
, these
technology
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technologies
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contain electric waves ,which can
interefere
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interfere
with
growth
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the growth
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of
children
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brain, which means they may be
children
get
unkown
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unknown
mental problems in future. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
play
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playing
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video
games
and
watch
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watching
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TV
can have adverse impacts on
mental
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the mental
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health
of
children
namely,
increase
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increased
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the
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apply
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violence
as well as
depression and anxiety.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • exposure to violence
  • addiction
  • reduced physical activity
  • hand-eye coordination
  • strategic thinking
  • multitasking skills
  • moderation
  • parental guidance
  • balanced approach
  • screen time
  • social interaction
  • sense of community
  • social skills
  • social isolation
  • alternative activities
  • outdoor activities
  • family interaction
  • mental health issues
  • educational programs
  • problem-solving games
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