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Percentage of electricity Productions bu fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010.

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The two
pue
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pie
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 charts Compare the percentage of 5 categories (coal, oil, natural gas,
hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 and nuclear
power
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) in France between 1990 and 2010. It is noticeable that the percentage of
electricity
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production
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natural gas and coal experienced a significant fall over the
20 year
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20-year
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white
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while
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 figure nuclear
power
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 saw a big rose. In 1990,28% an average in
France
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France's
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electricity
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production
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 went
on
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 natural gas which is the second largest pie of the chart,
howvever
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however
 bu 2010 the figure for
this
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 category had fallen by4% . During a
two decade
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 ago, the demand for coal of France consumers experienced a considerable fall from 28% to 13%.By
contast
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contrast
, in terms of nuclear
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power
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 the percentage of
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production
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this
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in this
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 category made up 17% in 1990 and after 20 years
this
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 figure saw a big increase
at
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 67% making it the largest
electricity
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production
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