Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise, pollution, and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low-cost passenger flights, often to holiday destinations. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

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passenger flights lead to more noise pollution and airport construction. As a solution, governmental institutions should raise the prices to discourage
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to use
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way of transport. I fully disagree
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statement because air traffic is not the only source
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kind of pollution. Are alternative ways for cars or factories which
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help it, or better places for airports where pollution can be kept under control.
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, the government should keep the prices low for transport but ,
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instead
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it must encourage the usage of electric cars. Apart
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airplanes
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which function just with petrol, are a huge variety of vehicles which reduce noise and atmosphere deterioration
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as trains, electric cars or bicycles. If national authorities raise global awareness about the importance of a clean and healthy environment, will be seen
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categorical improvement.
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the authority can raise taxes for petrol-based
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because
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can opt for alternatives. In
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, people will use
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and the level of infection will be similar. A better option is to invest more money in manufacturing of a
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fuel. Plant-based petrol or hydrogen could be just
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solutions. If all flights will be less accessible, the state will create
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public outrage. current progressions regarding air transport should be encouraged, because people can benefit from uncountless advantages. In ,conclusion raising the prices, is not a solution for improving the quality of air and reducing the noise,
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could be used alternative methods
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the environment.
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