The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
There are two different
bar
graphs given which demonstrate about
the percentage of Change preposition
apply
people
who were born in Australia
and outside Australia
living in urban, rural and towns
between 1995 and 2010. The bar
graph shows the different values of the population living in Australia
and outside the country
. As can be analyzed, the first bar
graph includes that in 1995 people
born in Australia
50% live
in Wrong verb form
lived
cities
, 20% live
in Wrong verb form
lived
towns
and 30% live
in rural Wrong verb form
lived
areas
. On the contrary
in 1995 people
born outside Australia
60% live in cities
, 15% live in towns
and 40% live
in rural Wrong verb form
lived
areas
of the country
. Another bar
graph for 2010 includes that people
born in Australia
65% live in cities
, 15% live in towns
and 15% live in rural areas
. In contrast
with 2010 people
born outside the
Correct article usage
apply
Australia
80% live in cities
, 10% live in towns
and 5% live in rural areas
of the country
. Overall
, in comparison to the 1995 and 2010 bar
graphs people
born in and outside Australia
live in towns
increases which are born outside Australia
and people
born in Australia
have less number of people
live in towns
, rural areas
of the country
.Submitted by bilaltip2000 on
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