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The charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in Dutch in five years

The charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in Dutch in five years
The pie charts demonstrate the rate of
energy
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 produced by
gas
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, coal,
petrol
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, nuclear, and others over the 5-year period in Dutch.
Overall
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, fossil fuel,
gas
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, coal, and
petrol
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, were stable despite a drop in
petrol
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 meanwhile there was an upward trend in nuclear and other. In 1995, the fossil fuel group, which were
gas
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, coal, and
petrol
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, were
approximately
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 with each other at 29.63%, 29.8%, and 29.27% of the total number of
energy
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 produced by these sources respectively. After 5 years,
gas
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 and coal, which comprised 30.31% and 30.93%, witnessed a very tiny increase and still approximately equalled
while
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 petroleum was seen a drop to 19.55%. Renewable energies, nuclear and other
energy
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, were the minority of the pie charts took out 6.4% and 4.9% respectively. In 2000, both categories witnessed a raise of 3.7% and 4.2% in the total amount of
energy
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 produced.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, petrol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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