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it is observed that most governments pay a lot of money for the art projects. For instance, there are more and more paintings and sculptures seen in public places. Some people say that it is wrong and governments should spend more money on other important things of public interest. Do you agree or disagree?

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A tourist attraction is the most important aspect in terms of economic growth of any agrarian. People are attracted to places which show the rich cultural heritage of a particular place. Nowadays the
government
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 spent a hefty amount of
funds
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 on art projects like paintings and sculptures which are seen in public places. Painting and sculptures are like the cherry on top. It symbolizes the agrarian's economy
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 its rich culture. If we consider the sculpture of Dr Vallabhbhai Patel in Gujarat, the authority has spent a large amount of
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 on it, but it has become a well-known tourist spot as it is the agrarian's tallest sculpture in India. Local communities get benefits as their businesses grow. The agrarian's economy
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 boosts up
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 factor. Few people who support human rights disagree with the
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 spending fund on these art projects. These people oppose the
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 for public interest as they think the
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 should spend more amount of
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 on other necessary things of public interest. They argue that authorities should provide every facility to their citizens. They think if the homey's citizens are not satisfied
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 it's a waste to spend
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 on art projects. In my opinion, the
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 should take care of both things from public interest to installing artefacts and paintings, as the country's growth is a topic of concern.
Government
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 should consider public opinion
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 the country's growth.
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