The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in UK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002.
As is presented in the
diagram
gives us information about cellphone calls in the UK with the total number of minutes in billions which are divided into 3 Use synonyms
categories
: 1) Local – fixed Use synonyms
line
; 2) National and international – fixed Use synonyms
line
; 3) Mobiles (all calls), over a Use synonyms
period
of 7 years between 1995-2002.
It is clear from the Use synonyms
diagram
, that in 1995 these 3 Use synonyms
categories
are presented with the least indicator Use synonyms
such
as mobiles with over 3 per Linking Words
cent
, national and international – fixed Use synonyms
line
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as well as
over 37 per Linking Words
cent
, and it is obvious from the Use synonyms
diagram
that these 2 Use synonyms
categories
are the lowest indicators during Use synonyms
these 7 years
Change the determiner
this 7 years period
these 7 years periods
period
and the Use synonyms
last
category local fixed Linking Words
line
belongs with over 72% which Use synonyms
equal
to indicator in 2002. In the Replace the word
equates
last
year of Linking Words
this
Linking Words
period
, as the Use synonyms
diagram
Use synonyms
suggest
these 2 Change the verb form
suggests
categories
grew up by Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
period
. Use synonyms
Mobiles
indicator Replace the word
Mobile
equal
to 45 per Add a missing verb
is equal
cent
, and Use synonyms
national
and international – fixed Correct article usage
the national
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line
equal to 61 per Fix the agreement mistake
lines
cent
. The highest indicators during these years Use synonyms
resides
Change the verb form
reside
to
2002.Change preposition
in
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