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Write an email to the mall manager in about 150-200 words. Your email should do the following things: Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking. Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now. Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.

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Dear sir, My name is Surbhi and I am writing
this
 letter to complain about the lack of parking facilities in the shopping mall. Me and my family visit the place frequently
therefore
, most of the time we must spend about 1 hour roaming around the parking location to find the spot.
Moreover
, it's more crowded as compared to the location.
In addition
 to
this
 40% of the space is filled by special need people.
Furthermore
, we must park on the other side of the street and had to walk for 5-7 minutes.
Moreover
, we must pay $15 extra
whereas
 over here the price is cheaper.
Firstly
 it’s not just about my family there are lots of people who go through the same thing again and again. In ,conclusion highly recommend you consider
this
 situation and can ask the municipal corporation to allow some reserved area at the nearby location which can reduce the capacity of special needs so that others can use that area. Please look into
this
 matter. Yours Sincerely, Surbhi
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