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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter regarding that I lost my Student
ID
last
 week.
Certainely
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Certainly
, I contend I lost my
ID
card
 in
school
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 library. I already asked the librarian about my
card
 and reported my problem to the library office;
however
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 they didn't find my
Id
card
. Because of the
Id
card
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,card
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 I am suffering from a plethora of problems.
Initially
, when I enter the school
everyday
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, security always
ask
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 me about the
Id
card
 which give me a bit of stress in the morning time. Despite
this
, I can't able to get my discount in the cafeteria
and
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 a
book shop
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.
Moreover
, a
librabrian
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librarian
also
 gave me a warning a couple of
time
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 and impede me to use the library services. I submitted 10 dollars for a new
ID
card
,
along with
 the
ID
 information form. I generously requested you please make my
Id
card
 as soon as possible. I hope you will look forward
it
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 as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely, Tania
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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