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Many crimes are often related to the consumption of alcohol. Some people think that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to ban alcohol. Do you think this is an effective measure against crime and what other solutions can you suggest

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The two tables compare how the habit of smoking is distributed statistically over 6
age
 clusters in
men
 versus
women
. The
overall
 trend is that as the
age
 grows, people are less inclined towards
such
habit
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. The maximum tendency is seen among those in their early 20s. Teenage boy
smokers
, between 16 and 19 years old, account for 23% of their
age
 group, which is only 2
percent
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 less than the corresponding female
smokers
. In all the other
age
groups
,
men
 represent a higher percentage. 20-24-year-olds demonstrate the highest peak in
men
 and
women
smokers
 each, 36% and 29% respectively. Light
smokers
 in both genders are way higher in number than
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heavy ones, at least 4 times more. 25- to 49-year-olds which consist of two
of
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the
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33%
smokers
 in
men
 and 28% in
women
; among whom, the absolute majority are light
smokers
 especially the males in their middle
age
, 22%
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 average. The
last
 category, the 50-year-olds and elders, demonstrate the least inclination for smoking among all
age
groups
.
Men
 and
women
 are about 20% and 18% respectively; and these
smokers
, similar to the
last
 2
groups
, are more of the light smoking type.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • consumption of alcohol
  • effective measure
  • ban alcohol
  • contribute to
  • types of crimes
  • other solutions
  • reduce the crime rate
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • stricter law enforcement
  • penalties
  • support
  • rehabilitation
  • alcohol addicts
  • root causes of crime
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