The chart bellow shows the different level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999

The chart bellow shows the different  level of post-school qualifications in Australia and proportion of men and women who held them in 1999
The graph illustrates the various levels of post-school qualifications among Australian individuals and the ratio of
males
and females who held them in 1999.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that rates of skilled vocational diplomas were the highest among Australian
males
(over 90%),
whereas
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rates were minuscule among
women
(slightly 10%).
According to
the bar chart, it is interesting to note that men (nearly 70%)
also
lead
women
(only 30%) from getting a postgraduate diploma.
In addition
, 60%
males
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in Australia got a master’s
degree
,
while
only 40%
women
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got an identical
degree
in 1999.
However
, the level of
males
(nearly 40%) who got undergraduate diplomas was 30% lower in comparison with
women
(more than 70%). Despite that proportion, the percentage of people who got a bachelor’s
degree
, regardless of genes, was slightly equal. To give details, nearly 50% of men acquired a bachelor’s
degree
whilst nearly 60% of
women
got the same
degree
in 1999.
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