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The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

#figures #information #growth #household #expenditure #range #categories #summarise #features #comparisions
The given line graph represents the enhancement of
economy
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the economy
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 during a period of 15 years (from 1995 to 2020). The pie charts show the breakdown of household
expenditure
, divided
in
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into
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 different categories over the same time period. As
it
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apply
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is represented in the 2 figures, when the economic
growth
 gets higher, the need
of
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for
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 housing, clothing and other
uitilities
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utilities
expenditure
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expenditures
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also
 rises. During the first 10 years,
while
 the economic
growth
flutuated
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fluctuated
 and rose sharply
in
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at
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 the end of 2005,
reached
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reaching
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 its peak at 5%, the amount of housing, clothing, entertainment and travel needs are seemingly upward (in
comparision
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comparison
 to
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the year
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year
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years
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 1995 and 2000).
On the other hand
, it can be seen that economic
growth
 is inversely proportional
with
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to
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 fundamental needs
such
 as food. Around the middle of 2005 and 2010, the economy dramatically showed
downward
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a downward
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 trend, which caused a sharp rise in
expenditure
of
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on
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 food (about
on
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one
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 third of total household
expenditure
).
Overall
, there is a negative correlation between economic
growth
 and the amount of household
expenditure
.
While
economic
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the economic
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 upward trend appears to act as a stimulus to housing and clothing demands, it can lower the need of people's fundamental needs, and inverse.
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