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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the comparison between those who was born in
Australia
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 and those who was born abroad living in different types of urban planning from 1995 to 2010.
Overall
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, it is possible to say that the number of
people
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 living in
cities
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 increased dramatically.
On the contrary
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, the percentage of those who chose to live in rural
areas
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 fall down significantly. In 1995 among
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 majority (50%) lived in
cities
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while
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 the least popular category was rural area with approximately 30% of residents. At the same period of time, 60% of
people
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 born outside
Australia
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 chose to live in
cities
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, 40% preferred to stay in rural
areas
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, and only 10% of population lived in towns. Looking at the year 2010, it can be noted that like in the previous period of time, the biggest part of population live in
cities
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: Marginally over 60% among those who born in
Australia
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 and 80% of
people
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 born outside
Australia
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’s borders.
According to
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 data,
people
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 born in
Australia
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 share the same percentage in terms of living in towns and rural
areas
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 at approximately 16%.
Although
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, the percentage of
people
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 born outside
Australia
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 living in towns and rural
areas
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 is considerably lower comparing with
people
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 born in
Australia
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: approximately 10% and 5% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, people, cities, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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