The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

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The bar charts display what UK graduate and postgraduate students went on to do after leaving university in 2008. Those who started working full-time were excluded.

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, the most common destination for graduate students was

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study and the least common was voluntary

work

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. The same was true of postgraduate students.

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, nearly 30,000 graduates who continued on to

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studies greatly outnumbered their counterparts who ended up in other situations. In comparison only 3,500 graduates did voluntary

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, making it the least common postgraduation destination.

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those who worked part-time and those who were unemployed were very similar in number at 17,735 and 16,235 respectively.

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, those who did

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study at 2,725 and those who did voluntary

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at 345 were

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the biggest and smallest group respectively for postgraduates.

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far more postgraduates did part-time

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at 2,535 than went into unemployment at 1,625.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

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graduate and postgraduate students
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further study
part-time work
voluntary work
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financial needs
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