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The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
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The chart illustrates the data of
students
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 (
graduates
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 & postgraduates) in the UK who decided not to go for a full-time job in the year 2008. The information are collected on 5 parameters( part-time, voluntary,
further
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 study, and unemployment)
Overall
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, the majority of
students
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 chose to continue their education,
while
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 the least number of
graduates
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 chose to engage in volunteer work.
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,
students
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 who took up part-time jobs reported that they were satisfied, moving
this
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 criterion to the second highest. Plus, a large number of UK
graduates
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 are underemployed contrasted with postgraduates. In 2008, 2,725 post-
graduates
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 and 29,665
graduates
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 decided to study
further
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whereas
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, only 345 and 3,500 chose voluntary work respectively. In terms of part-time work,there is a significant difference of 15,200
students
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 when comparing
graduates
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 and post-
graduates
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.
In addition
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, only 1,625 postgraduates are without employment, compared to 16,235
graduates
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 making the UK's
graduates
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 the group of people with the highest unemployment rate in 2008
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate and postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • voluntary work
  • engagement levels
  • trend analysis
  • financial needs
  • social consciousness
  • practical experience
  • personal growth
  • international exposure
  • gap period
  • unemployed
  • economic reasons
  • career paths
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