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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The line graph illustrates the number of
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 in four different libraries during 2014, and the pie chart shows five types of
books
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 that were borrowed during the same period from June to September including Self-help, Fiction, History, Science and Biography.
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, it can be clearly seen that the number of borrowed
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 increased from June to September in all the village libraries, except two libraries dropped by Ryeslip from 300 to 170
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 in four months and Sutton Wood from 250 to 90
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 during August. In terms of the highest borrowed ,
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 Fiction stands at the top of other types of
books
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 at 43% followed by Biography at 19%,
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 History and Science were similar standings at 14%, and the lowest percentage was Self-help at 10%. in summary, the number of borrowed
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 increased during summer time
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 were people had enough time and long weekends to read more
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 on different subjects.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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