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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of UK citizens in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of UK citizens in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart indicates the expenditure of different
age
 groups of UK citizens under three different categories in 2004. In general with
growing
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the growing
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age
, the demand for food and drink has increased significantly and the need for going to
restaurants
 and
hotels
 has decreased. It can be observed from the graph that the spending priorities of
individuals
 changed with
age
. The
individuals
 under 30
age
group
 liked to spend their
money
 more on
restaurants
 and
hotels
, which is almost 13% of their spending.
This
 is
in contrast
 to the ones between 61 to 75 years of
age
, as the
individuals
 in
this
 category were least interested in spending
money
 on
restaurants
 and
hotels
 which was almost 2% of their spending.
However
, their spending on food, drink
and
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apply
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restaurants
 and
hotels
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 relatively higher.
Likewise
, the
individuals
 in the 76+
age
group
 were more interested in spending
money
 on food and drink which is approximately 22%, but least interested in spending
money
 on entertainment or
restaurants
 and
hotels
 which is 7% and 12% respectively.
Lastly
, the spending habit of
individuals
 between the 31 to
45 year
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45-year
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age
group
 in all three categories was almost similar to the
individuals
of
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in
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46
Correct article usage
the 46
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 to
60 year
Add a hyphen
60-year
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age
group
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, restaurants, hotels, individuals, group, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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