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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The given bar chart compares the
percentage
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 of two genders in Australia: men and
women
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 in various age groups who did
exercise
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 regularly in 2010.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the number of
women
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 doing
exercise
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 saw an upward trend through the older.
However
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, the opposite will be true for the man. First of all, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 from 45 to 54 doing
exercise
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 reach the highest peak which is about 53%. Follow by is the group of
people
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 from 55 to 64 years old which is just lower than the first 0.3%.
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,
women
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 in the age group of 35 to 44 had the lowest
percentage
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 of
people
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 who did physical activity. For the man, the group of age from 15 to 24 had the highest
percentage
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 of
people
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 doing
exercise
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 which is 52.8%. Opposite with the
women
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, from 35 to 44, the men had the lowest
percentage
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 of
people
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 who did work out which is lower than 14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, women, exercise, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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