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You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. In your letter include - explain your and your friends' project - ask if is it possible to rent the hall and under what terms. - state what day and what times you would like to use the hall.

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Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing
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 the hall for our dance club practice and meeting purpose. My name is Jen, and I am the leader of the dance club. We are a group of 15 dance-lover students. We want to
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 the place for our group activities like practice and meetings. We want to enhance our abilities before National Dance Marathon, which is supposed to be held after three months. Before the competition, it is needed for us to focus on our strengths and weaknesses. We will arrange for all the required equipment. For the next 3 months, we would like to
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 the hall for every Friday and Saturday evening from 6.00 to 9.00. On the basis of
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 detail, I am wondering whether it is possible for you to
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 us the hall or not. If you are ok with us,
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 please let us know about your terms and conditions. I would
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 like to request you to quote us competitive
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, as we all are students. Looking for your favourable reply. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Jen Kale

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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