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IELTS Bar chart - percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in UK from 2001 to 2008.

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The bar chart illustrates in percentages the
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 of people who ate five meals of fruits or vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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, the
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 of women was considerably higher than the
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 of men or children all period of time. Looking more closely, the
rate
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 of children was similar in the first three years of roughly 12%.
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, the percentage sharply rose until 2007 when reached its peak of approximately 25%, followed by a slight decrease. Throughout the period, the pattern in men's
rate
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 was rather different by just 5 %. The
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 gradually grew until 2006, when it arrived at around 27% and remained unchanged
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 in the next year. Regarding women's percentage, it can be observed that the
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 increased steadily from 20% in 2001 to 35% in 2006, when it arrived at the maximum level from the chart.
It is clear that
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 in 2007 and 2008, the
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 of them fell gradually below 30%.
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