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The chat below gives information about global sale of game software cds and DVD or video

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The bar chart demonstrates the number of sales of game software DVD has changed in the world from 2000 to 2003. One of the first places
it is clear that
 CDs
weren
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 the only item to sale was
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 during the given,
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sale
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 of DVDs and video augmented steadily throughout the three years in 2000 cities have around $35 million which was up to 2 times of the trading of gaming software.
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addition
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 there was a noticeable growth
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 DVD video sales from $18 in 2000 to 30 billion in 2003
however
 the figures
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 bargaining of CD was goes down steadily
whereas
 on
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hands
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 the figures
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 gaming software
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 rose
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constantly from 12 billion in 2000 to 18 billion in 2003 .
overall
, the sale of DVD
video
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 increased significantly
whereas
 CD declined but still the highest amount
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 three items.
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