The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts reveal
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the percentage of Correct pronoun usage
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time
working adults with the difference in 50 years.
The first thing we can see is that amount of working time
has increased by 9%. On the contrary
, time
spent with friends and family decreased by almost three times. The road to work began to take literally forth as much in comparison with 1958. Whereas
people start to spend more time
at home, the quantity of duration relaxing at home and sleeping raised on
5% and 7% respectively. Change preposition
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Also
we can highlight, that Add a comma
,Also
time
spent playing sports and other hobbies slightly changed, it grows by 2% in 2008 compared to 1958. We can summarise, that in 2008 people spends half of their time
related to work. That is
to say, they spend 50% of their day either going to work,
or at the office.
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To sum up
, all the changes in these 50 years are not so considerable.Submitted by li_istomina on
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