The bar chart gives information about women unemployment rates in four country of the UK in 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart gives information about women unemployment rates in four country of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart gives information about women unemployment rates in four country of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
The given bar chart illustrates unemployment rates among women in each country of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
Overall
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, England, Wales and Northern Ireland dropped
while
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only Scotland rose.
In addition
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, Northern Ireland became the least country with unemployed women.
To begin
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with, England had the highest unemployment rate in 2013 with 6,8%.
By contrast
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, Wales had only 5.4% of jobless females, being the lowest that year. England dropped by 0.3% and Wales by 0.4% with final results of 6.5% and 5.0%
respectfully
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. In comparison with them, Northern Ireland had an exponential downfall by 1% becoming the country with
least
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the lowest
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percentage of jobless women.
By
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contrary
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the contrary
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, Scotland's rate increased
,
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and was 6.7% almost like in
Sngland
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England
in 2013.

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