The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

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The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched

reality

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and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+

age

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groups

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in Australia. We can see from the data that most Australian people watched more

reality

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shows than game shows,

as a result

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the

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apply

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reality

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shows are more popular.

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shows

watched

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are watched

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by about 70 % of women

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, which is almost double as many as men. If we compare by

age

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groups

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, the percentage of human beings watching

reality

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shows increases steadily from ages 16 to 45 with the lowest percentage of viewers, at just over 50% of the group 16-24 and the greatest percentage, at 68% of the over 45. The game shows are popular among the

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group over 45 years (70%)

whereas

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the smallest pattern is demonstrated by

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the 25

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-34

age

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group (38%).

As well as

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those are popular among both the male and female

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, at 60%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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156 words

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The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.