The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched
reality
and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+
age
groups
in Australia. We can see from the data that most Australian people watched more
reality
shows than game shows,
as a result
the
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show examples
reality
shows are more popular.
Reality
shows
watched
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are watched
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by about 70 % of women
groups
, which is almost double as many as men. If we compare by
age
groups
, the percentage of human beings watching
reality
shows increases steadily from ages 16 to 45 with the lowest percentage of viewers, at just over 50% of the group 16-24 and the greatest percentage, at 68% of the over 45. The game shows are popular among the
age
group over 45 years (70%)
whereas
the smallest pattern is demonstrated by
25
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the 25
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-34
age
group (38%).
As well as
those are popular among both the male and female
groups
, at 60%.
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