Topic: People living in big cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller town?

In
this
day and age, huge cities have many issues affecting
people
's day-to-day
life
directly. It is believed that today's citizens have to deal with several problems in their daily
life
. There are some main problems which are discussed in
this
essay. From my perspective, authorities ought to promote residents to move to smaller regional areas.
Firstly
, one of the major causes why
people
should be encouraged to live
in
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on
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the outskirts of the cities is
pollution
. Environmental
pollution
is a popular state in large cities
where
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that
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have a crowded population,
this
has a significant effect on
life
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the life
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quality of inhabitants.
For instance
, there are thousands of
people
suffering from diseases
relate
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to
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the lung
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lung
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lungs
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as well as
eyes yearly like lung cancer, and cataracts owing to air
pollution
.
Moreover
, water
pollution
affect
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affects
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considerably
people
's
life
, when rivers are more and more contaminated by garbage, trash,
chemical
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and chemical
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wastes from factories, which make fresh water become scarce.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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