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The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following illustration shows the
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 of
people
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 that have
access
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 to modern
technology
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 in their houses in the UK, from 1996 until 2003. The graph includes the following modern
technology
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 items
CD
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 player, mobile phone, home computer and
internet
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access
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.
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, we can observe an upward trend in each item's popularity. The most popular modern
technology
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 in 1996 was
CD
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 players and it remained the same in 2003, too. The least popular item in 1996 was mobile phones, unlike in 2003 which was
internet
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access
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.
Internet
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access
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 was invented in 1998 and after we can see a gradual increase in its
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. In 1998 only about 10% of
people
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 had
internet
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access
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, but in 2002/03 it was more than 40%. The popularity of mobile phones was fluctuating from 1996/97 until 2000/01. After we can observe a slight increase in the
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 of
people
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's
access
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 to mobile phones. About 20% of the population of the UK possessed a home computer. But
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percentage
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 has risen gradually. And ended up with approximately 60% of the population owning it. The
last
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 modern
technology
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 item
that is
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 depicted in the illustration is the
CD
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 player. 60% of English
people
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 had a
CD
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 player in 1996/97 and more than 80% of
people
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 had one in 2002/03.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, access, technology, cd, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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