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The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The following illustration shows the
percentage
 of
people
 that have
access
 to modern
technology
 in their houses in the UK, from 1996 until 2003. The graph includes the following modern
technology
 items
CD
 player, mobile phone, home computer and
internet
access
.
Overall
, we can observe an upward trend in each item's popularity. The most popular modern
technology
 in 1996 was
CD
 players and it remained the same in 2003, too. The least popular item in 1996 was mobile phones, unlike in 2003 which was
internet
access
.
Internet
access
 was invented in 1998 and after we can see a gradual increase in its
percentage
. In 1998 only about 10% of
people
 had
internet
access
, but in 2002/03 it was more than 40%. The popularity of mobile phones was fluctuating from 1996/97 until 2000/01. After we can observe a slight increase in the
percentage
 of
people
's
access
 to mobile phones. About 20% of the population of the UK possessed a home computer. But
this
percentage
 has risen gradually. And ended up with approximately 60% of the population owning it. The
last
 modern
technology
 item
that is
 depicted in the illustration is the
CD
 player. 60% of English
people
 had a
CD
 player in 1996/97 and more than 80% of
people
 had one in 2002/03.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, access, technology, cd, internet with synonyms.
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