The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the comparison between
men
and women in Britain who further
their education part-timetime
and Correct your spelling
part-time time
part-time-time
part-primetime
full-timetime
between the Correct your spelling
full-time time
full-sometime
full-time-time
year
1970 and 1991. Fix the agreement mistake
years
Overall
, between the three periods, the number
of male students
who study full-timetime
fluctuates Correct your spelling
full-time time
full-time-time
while
the number
of full-time female students
shows a gradual increase.
Firstly
, more men
further
their education full time in 1970 and 1971 bearing the figure of 1000 as compared to the women where the number
is just below 800. This
trendAdd the comma(s)
, however,
however
changes after 2 years as the number
of full-time female students
gradually rise and reached up to 1500 while
the number
of men
who
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whom
further
education full time fluctuates as the sum starts as high as 1000 in 1970,
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while
decreasing to 850 in 1980 and increasing again to 950 in 1990/91.
Meanwhile, this
is a different case for students
who studied part-timetime
as the graph shows development throughout three decades for both Correct your spelling
part-time time
part-time-time
men
and women. It begins with 150 for men
in 1970 and increases up
to 250 in 1990/91. Change preposition
apply
Similarly
with female students
where in the beginning it starts as low as 100 in the year 1970/1971 then
increase as a similar amount of male student in the year 1990/1991Submitted by nhana.paiman on
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