Most major cities around the world continue to grow at a phenomenal rate due to the massive increase in population. This has led to a general decline in the quality of life in city areas as the environment becomes more crowded and polluted. Give some reasons why this growth has occurred and suggest some practical solutions to this problem.

Most urban
areas
worldwide continue to
increase
at a phenomenal rate because
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extremely grow in inhabitants.
This
can have
a negative impacts
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a negative impact
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in
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the quality of life in city
areas
as the environment become
overcroweded
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overcrowded
and contaminated. In my opinion, there are several reasons behind the dramatic growth of
population
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in
cities
, and I will recommend some measures to mitigate
this
issue.
To begin
with, there are different reasons why the
population
in
cities
increased
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. The primary reason for
increase
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the increase
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inhabitants
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in inhabitants
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in urban
areas
is moving
people
from
countryside
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the countryside
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to
cities
.
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is because
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people
migrate to urban
areas
in order to find
a better opportunities
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better opportunities
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for jobs and education
,
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because the most of better companies , schools ,
universities
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and universities
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located
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in
cities
.
Consequently
,
this
trend can make urban
areas
more crowded, and
also
increase
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air, water,
noise
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and noise
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pollution ,
becaue
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because
the pollution is
result
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the result
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of human activities. No regulations regarding
birth
control
policy is another reason why
population
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the population
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increase
in urban
areas
. The
due to
the fact that
,
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people
who live in
cities
are having better living standards, which
this
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encourage
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them to have more children.
On the other hand
, I would like to suggest some actions in order to alleviate
this
problem. The first effective measure,
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the
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that
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governments should
enocurage
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encourage
the
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factories and private companies to move to agricultural
areas
in order to discourage
people
to move to
cities
.
This
is
becaue
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because
this
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these
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factories and private companies can provide jobs
as well as
education for
people
in rural
areas
. The second solution,
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the
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that
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governments should
introudce
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introduce
policy
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policies
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to
control
birth
.
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, in
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China
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,China
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the
miximum
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maximum
minimum
number of children for every
familiy
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family
is two,
which
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and
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this
policy can make
cities
less crowded as well polluted.
To sum up
, In my opinion, there are many reasons for
increasing
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the increasing
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population
in urban
areas
including, moving
people
for
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rural
areas
to
cities
,
no
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and no
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regulation for
birth
control
,
however
, I suggested some steps to reduce
this
trend namely, demotivate
people
to migrate to
cities
, introduce laws in terms of
birth
control
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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