The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The survey gives information about manufacturing and using electricity among 10 nations in 2014.

Overall

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, China ranked first in both groups and Korea stood

last

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, the rate of production was higher than consumption except in Germany. Looking at the production, China ranked first and stand at 5.398 kWh

however

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, the United States was the second biggest producer and it was 4.099. Russia, Japan and India formed 1.057, 936.2 and 877 respectively. France is under 57.7 lower than Canada.

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, Brazil was over 4 kWh larger than Germany and the remaining 485.1 was allocated to Korea. Going forward to consumption, China consumed more electricity than the US and ranked first. The share of Russia and Japan was 1.057 and 936.2 respectively.

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, Canada was almost as low as India.

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to Brazil, France is larger by 7 kWh. Korea ranked

last

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and Germany had the second lowest rank in the survey, the former formed 449.5 and the latter contributed 582.5.

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