You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The pie charts display information about how working adults
spend
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their
time
in a particular area in 1958 and 2008.
It is clear that
there was a considerable increase in the percentage of
time
employed
in
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working or travelling to the workplace, with a
subseuquent
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subsequent
reduction
of
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in
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leisure
time
with family or friends, and a decline
of
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in
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the sleeping period. In 1958 working adults invested a third of their
time
in their profession, roughly a third in their sleeping, and almost
one fifth
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one-fifth
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going out with their relatives. They used only an
unsignificant
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insignificant
proportion of their daytime travelling to reach their workplace
,
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and employed the rest of the day between sport and relaxing at home.
On the other hand
, in 2008 there was a steep rise in the percentage of
time
dedicated to the working area, jumping up to 50% if both working and commuting hours are merged. The proportion of moments dedicated to sleep sank by
one third
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to
one fourth
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one-fourth
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throughout the years. Leisure
time
suffered a dramatic decrease from 19% to 6%,
wherease
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whereas
chilling at home almost doubled. The amount of
time
dedicated to
sport
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saw a marginal growth from 6 to 8%.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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