The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts reveal
quantity
of Add an article
the quantity
a quantity
australians
, which were born in and outside the country in urban, rural and Change the capitalization
Australians
town
from 1995 to 2010.
It can be seen that Fix the agreement mistake
towns
at
Change preposition
in
bouth
charts Correct your spelling
both
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
population
born in and outside Add an article
the population
th
Australia are in Correct your spelling
the
equal
ratio Correct article usage
an equal
betwen
themselves. Correct your spelling
between
However
, quantity
of people born not in a megapolis extremely decreased in fifteen years.
On the one hand, on the first Add an article
the quantity
a quantity
graph
we can observe the same ratio for all of Add a comma
,graph
groups
, Add an article
the groups
in other words
, the first place takes men born in the cities, further
goes to towns, and the last
one is rural areas. On the other hand
, in 2010 people born in Australia in rural and towns are roughly equal, whereas
the precentage
of Correct your spelling
percentage
city
is almost four times higher.
Fix the agreement mistake
cities
To sum up
, we can see that in 15 years more people prefer to born
their children in Change the verb
bear
a big cities
, Correct the article-noun agreement
a big city
big cities
instead
of other options.Submitted by li_istomina on
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