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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular activity in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the percentages of Australian males and females in different
age
Use synonyms
 groups doing everyday activities in 2010.
Overall
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, the youngest male group is the most active in their gender and the females aged 45 to 54 were found to be the most in their gender. In 2010, almost half of Australian
men
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 (53%) and women (48%) aged 15 to 24 pitched in regular physical activities.
While
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 the participation of
men
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 dropped noticeably to 42.2% between ages 25 to 34, the same female
age
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 group remained roughly constant. With 39.5% of
men
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 aged 35 to 44 participated in exercises regularly,
whereas
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 the women in
this
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age
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 were far more active than
men
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 reaching 52.5%. In the end, the
last
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 three
age
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 groups of both genders were more active than teens.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • Percentage
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participation
  • Age group
  • Trend
  • Significant
  • Notable
  • Gender gap
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consistent
  • Decline
  • Progressive
  • Conversely
  • Motivations
  • Barriers
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