The graph on the right shows the unemployment figures amongst women of different age groups. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph on the right shows the unemployment figures amongst women of different age groups. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
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The depicted graph is presenting the percentages of working females
according to
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their
age
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between 18 and 65
years
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. Obviously,
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the work
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work force
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workforce
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of women rapidly declines after the
age
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of 35
years
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over a period of a decade, having its peak at the
age
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of 45
years
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(20% unemployment). Following, there is a decade of steadily rising employment again (90% at the
age
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of 55
years
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), remaining at the same high level until the
age
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of 65
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. It is
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clear that the strongest working power among women is at the
age
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of 25 to 35
years
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(only 5% unemployment),
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a gradual decline of lacking work at the
age
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of 18 to 25
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. 15% of 18-year-old female grown-ups have no salary.
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, unemployment among women has two peaks, one
of
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the
age
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of 18
years
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(15%),
another
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and another
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one at the
age
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of 45
years
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respectively (20%).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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