The chart gives information about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.

The chart gives information  about how much energy of different categories produced in France over the period of 5 years.
The pie chart illustrates information about the power produced by various five products(Coal,Gas,Petro,Nuclear and Others) in France between 1995 and 2005.
However
,calculations had been mentioned in percentages.
Overall
it is clear that
Coal and Gas had a slight increase in the given period
while
Other power products and Nuclear had moderate growth
whereas
Petro was the only one which had decreased in the given decade. In terms of Coal which
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used at 29.80% in 1995 and
then
had a very minor increase of 1.13% over ten years in 2005 as compared to Other items which had a rise of 4.20% from 1995 to 2005.
Moreover
, in 2005 Coal and other resources were used 30.93% and 9.10% respectively.
On the other hand
, petrol which had declined in the given 10 years as petro was used at 29.27% in 1995 and as time passed in 2005 its consumption had fallen to 19% round about it had fall of 10%
while
if we compare it with Nuclear which had a consumption of 6.40% in 1995 and the increased to 10.10% in 2005.
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