The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.
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The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States,
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, and
Japan
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. The diorama illustrates the expenditures on food, housing, transportation, health care,
clothing
Correct word choice
and clothing

It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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of Americans, Canadians, English and Japanese in 2009.
Overall
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, much more money was spent on housing in each of these countries than on
other
Correct article usage
the other

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four
categoris
Correct your spelling
categories

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. The highest
percentage
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of housing costs was in the US, it was over 25%. In second place was the UK with 24%.
Then
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

Japan
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with a
percentage
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of 22%. And the lowest
percentage
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of housing costs was in
Canada
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,approximately 21%. The highest consumption of food was in
Japan
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amounting
about
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to about

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23%. After
Japan
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is the UK with 20%. Almost the same rates were in the US and
Canada
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, about 14 and 15
percents
Fix the agreement mistake
percent

It seems that percents may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. Transportation
cost
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costs

It seems that cost may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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in
Canada
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and
United
Correct article usage
the United

Your article usage with the geographic name United States may be incorrect.

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States were higher than the rate for other nations, approximately 20% and 17%. The United Kingdom's rate was 15%. The lowest transportation expenditure was 10% in
Japan
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.
In contrast
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, health care and clothing were the cheapest two sectors. The highest
percentage
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in
the
Correct article usage
apply

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health care was
the
Change preposition
in the

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US with about 7% and the lowest was 2% in the UK.
Canada
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's and
Japan
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's figures were the same, approximately 4%. There were
not
Correct your spelling
no

The word not doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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noticeable differences in the
percentage
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

of the citizens in these countries spending on clothing, between 4% and 6%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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