The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.
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The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States,
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, and
Japan
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. The diorama illustrates the expenditures on food, housing, transportation, health care,
clothing
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and clothing
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of Americans, Canadians, English and Japanese in 2009.
Overall
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, much more money was spent on housing in each of these countries than on
other
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the other
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four
categoris
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categories
. The highest
percentage
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of housing costs was in the US, it was over 25%. In second place was the UK with 24%.
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Japan
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with a
percentage
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of 22%. And the lowest
percentage
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of housing costs was in
Canada
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,approximately 21%. The highest consumption of food was in
Japan
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amounting
about
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to about
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23%. After
Japan
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is the UK with 20%. Almost the same rates were in the US and
Canada
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, about 14 and 15
percents
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percent
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. Transportation
cost
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costs
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in
Canada
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and
United
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the United
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States were higher than the rate for other nations, approximately 20% and 17%. The United Kingdom's rate was 15%. The lowest transportation expenditure was 10% in
Japan
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.
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, health care and clothing were the cheapest two sectors. The highest
percentage
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in
the
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apply
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health care was
the
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in the
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US with about 7% and the lowest was 2% in the UK.
Canada
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's and
Japan
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's figures were the same, approximately 4%. There were
not
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no
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noticeable differences in the
percentage
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of the citizens in these countries spending on clothing, between 4% and 6%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, japan, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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