On a recent holiday you lost a valuable piece of jewellery. Fortunately you have travel insurance which covers the cost of any lost or damaged items. White a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter, -Describe the item you lost -Explain how you lost it -Tell the insurance company what you would like to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to make a claim for an item which I

was

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recently lost on my holiday in Hawaii

last

week. I lost my necklace which my partner gave me as a birthday gift

last

year. It is a Tiffany necklace in pink gold colour and has a little diamond,

also

inscribed '120922' on the backside. It was purchased in December in Melbourne CBD in 2022.

While

we were staying at

Waikiki

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the Waikiki

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hotel

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Hotel

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, we went to a swimming pool inside the hotel a few times. It could be possible that I lost my

jewelley

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jewellery

during swimming as the pool was quite packed. But unfortunately, I did not notice that I have lost my

nacklace

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necklace

at the time. It was not until we had returned to our room on the 15th,

July

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. I am very upset since it was not only a valuable item but it

also

had great sentimental value. I have read my travel insurance book several times and believe that your policy covers my lost item. I would

therefore

like to make a claim

full

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amount for the

nakelace

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necklace

. I

also

enclosed a copy of the

reciept

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receipt

. I would

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really

appriciate

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appreciate

appreciated

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you could process my request as soon as possible. Thank you very much in advance for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Keiko Oka

Submitted by keiko_o_1209 on Mon Jul 10 2023

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

231 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

Some cities have few control over design and construction on housing and office buildings. People think that they are free to choose the design they like. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Some people say that the technology advancement enables people to entertain at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some people think that all lawbreakers should be taken into prison, while others believe that there are better alternatives (for example, doing some work or learning some skills in the community). Discuss both views and give your opinion.