The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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These two paragraphs show the percentage of
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computer
ownership in different ages between 2002-2010. Technology Use synonyms
have
been developed for so long and it goes by very fast. It still continuing to make many more in the future.
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future
they are probably going to discover new things. As you can see for now, they are starting to make robots to do things for us, which means the technology is still going and people are working on it at the moment. Add a comma
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Computer
have been one of the most popular technologies Fix the agreement mistake
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the past and it still famous now a day. The Change preposition
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computer
was getting to know since 2002. As you can see Use synonyms
computers
were not that popular for the first 2 years but it gets started to know more and more over the next few years.
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Computers
were not that popular for Use synonyms
the
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school
kids in both years 2002 and 2010. Use synonyms
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college students started to use Correct article usage
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computers
in 2002, which means they needed Use synonyms
computers
to study Use synonyms
in
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higher
degree of study since that time. Add an article
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, if you look at the second graph, the higher percentages were from Linking Words
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the higher
school
.
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ownership was increasing since Use synonyms
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as much as older students. Now, Use synonyms
computers
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, they are teaching kids how to use them and get them into a modern technology world.Use synonyms
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, computers, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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