The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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These two paragraphs show the percentage of
the
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computer
ownership in different ages between 2002-2010. Technology have
been developed for so long and it goes by very fast. It still continuing to make many more in the future.
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future
they are probably going to discover new things. As you can see for now, they are starting to make robots to do things for us, which means the technology is still going and people are working on it at the moment. Add a comma
,future
Computer
have been one of the most popular technologies Fix the agreement mistake
Computers
from
the past and it still famous now a day. The Change preposition
in
computer
was getting to know since 2002. As you can see computers
were not that popular for the first 2 years but it gets started to know more and more over the next few years.
Computers
were not that popular for the
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school
kids in both years 2002 and 2010. However
, some of
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the
college students started to use Correct article usage
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computers
in 2002, which means they needed computers
to study in
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for
higher
degree of study since that time. Add an article
a higher
Moreover
, if you look at the second graph, the higher percentages were from higher
degree of study, which means they were not necessary in high Add an article
a higher
the higher
school
.
Thus
, the
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computer
ownership was increasing since then
, and I’m sure it still increasing every day and, in the future, also
. They were popular in a group of college or higher degree students, but they were not popular in high school
as much as older students. Now, computers
are more popular in high school
, they are teaching kids how to use them and get them into a modern technology world.Submitted by kanchanakularathna1991 on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, computers, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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