The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

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The data provided illustrates the former statistics and predicts the upcoming trends of elder population, aged 65 and above, all united in percent. The table contains the citizenship proportion in 3 distintive years: 1988, 2000, 2030, in 3 countries: Canada, Germay, and the United Kingdom.

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is the most crowed country in 3 years displayed in the table.

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, people aged 65 onwards were living, and possibly living in

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the future. Surprisingly, the proportion of the target group grew and will potentially grow constantly, for 5 percent each. As seen, in

Germany

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, there are 20% of elders in 1988, 25% in 2000, and 25% in 2030.

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, other countries including Canada and the UK

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have the upward trend of citizen aged 65 and above who lived and might live in their countries. Like

Germany

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, Canada shows the rising of population by 5% from the previous years.

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, the United Kingdom exhibited the unstable trend: between 1988 and 2000, only 1% increase in the number of citizen aged 65 and so on.

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, the upcoming trend in 2030 predicts the huge increase of 5% in polulation, from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2030.

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The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

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