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The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.

The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.
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The graph informs about how much
money
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 paid on books in four European countries (
Germany
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, France, Italy, and Austria) for ten years between 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, there was a decent enhancement the amount of
money
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 spent in
Germany
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, France, Italy, and Austria with
Germany
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 being the country that spent the most bill on books.
Firstly
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, there was a fluctuation in how much
money
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 was paid on books in
Germany
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 which started at 80
million
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 in 1995 and ended above 90
million
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 by the end of 2005.
While
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 Italy got increased from 1995 to 1997 by about 5
million
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 and fluctuated eight years later to nearly above 60
million
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.
On the other hand
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, France began approximately from 50
million
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 and increased slightly towards the ten years to beyond 70
million
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. Austria with the lowest
money
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 spent in 1995 rose gradually to 40
million
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 in 2001,
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furthermore
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 it rose significantly from 40 to above 70
million
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 in 2005.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, germany, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • amount of money
  • paid on cars
  • China
  • Vietnam
  • Thailand
  • Indonesia
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • significant increase
  • highest amount
  • steady growth
  • lowest overall spending
  • started at
  • doubled
  • nearly
  • reached
  • exceeded
  • among
  • half a billion dollars
  • conclusion
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