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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The bar chart illustrates the summary amount of types of telephone calls from 1995 to 2002 and what tendency of using different calls,divided into three categories — local calls,
nationat
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national
 and international and the
last
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 one — mobile calls.
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, as could be seen, the most intense growth of
minutes
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 in
designated
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the designated
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 period has a mobile
type
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,
meanwhile
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 the other calls
categoties
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categories
 have
propensity
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a propensity
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 to fluctuate or not
significally
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significantly
 increase. Based on statistics, between the years 1995 and
2002
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,2002
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 the
minutes
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 of telephone calls with fixed
line
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lines
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 gradually raised til
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year
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the year
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 1999 with a peak point
in
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of
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 90
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billions
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billion
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minutes
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. Despite the past growth,
this
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 particular
type
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 of
calls
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call
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 considerably fell down to the
started
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 point by the
year
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 2002. In the meantime, the national and international calls
type
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 shows
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apply
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stable growth from almost 40 billion
minutes
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 to come up over
than
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50
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billions
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billion
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. The most profound rise in that three categories has a mobile calls
type
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, that
on
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at
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 the beginning of
the
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apply
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1995 was equivalent close to
the
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zero. But
further
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 to
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year
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the year
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 1999 it steadily
grow
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 up to 15
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billions
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billion
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.
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, beginning
this
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year
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,
minutes
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 doubled for the next following years
almost
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by almost
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till
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apply
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50
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billions
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billion
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, type, year, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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