The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.
The bar graph provided information about the rate of part-time employees in each country of the United Kingdom in the year 1980 and in 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are four countries. England and Wales have rise
in percentage, Correct article usage
a rise
whereas
Northern Ireland has a downfall
rate.
Replace the word
fall
On the other hand
, during the 1980's the worker's rate had
fluctuation. Unnecessary verb
apply
The
England in 1980 has 25% of labours for part-time work, Correct article usage
apply
as well as
, in 2010 it increased to 5% of workers
for a job. The
Northern Ireland in the first period has 19% and in the Correct article usage
apply
,
Remove the comma
apply
last
it has 18% of workers
, therefore
in Northern Ireland there is not much difference in the employee's amount.
Secondly
, Scotland have
shown a rise in labour application for short-duration work. Change the verb form
has
However
, it has 10% during the beginning and drastically rises to 25% at the end
of the era. Moreover
, the last
country is Wales the percentage of part-time workers
in Wales is at peak
. Correct pronoun usage
its peak
In addition
, the region has an upward trend, along with
it, it has 40% of workers
in the year 2010.Submitted by fazilharis20 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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