Some think that it is more important for children to engage in outdoor activities instead of playing video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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the internet
internet
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plethora
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a plethora
video
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games
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click. In today's world , it is essential to keep up with the pace of the moving world, Correct article usage
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we should not be neglecting and acknowledging the benefits of our old traditional outdoor activities which we use to play before Add a comma
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and will provide my conclusion.
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games
and activities has Use synonyms
it's
own set of benefits. First of all, going out and playing on the playgrounds or parks will increase their physical endurance and stamina which eventually will be beneficial to their Replace the word
its
overall
health development and will help in building the immune system which can combat many Linking Words
illness
. So Change to a plural noun
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overall
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mean
healthy
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a healthy
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, going out and playing with Linking Words
inculcate
a sense of bonding amongst the kids and will impart the essence of social bonding amongst them which is kind of fading from today's generation. Correct pronoun usage
them inculcate
Pracitically
, I do not see any major cons of playing outdoor Correct your spelling
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games
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person
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a person
due to
some kind of injury or disease.
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On the other hand
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video
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games
on mobile or computer only invites Use synonyms
lot
of health and social issues. Change the article
a lot
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video
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games
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very popular and addictive among Correct pronoun usage
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the
children . Correct article usage
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As a result
, kids would be glued to their gadgets in their greed to complete Linking Words
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more level which will eventually impact Use synonyms
the
eyesight and their Change the word
their
overall
health as they would be sitting at Linking Words
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place Use synonyms
thoroughout
and playing these Correct your spelling
throughout
games
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study
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the New
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have
mentioned the increase in social avoidance amongst the younger generation as Change the verb form
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of the side Use synonyms
effect
of excessive use of online Change to a plural noun
effects
games
.Young kids are so Use synonyms
much
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apply
involed
in these Correct your spelling
involved
video
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games
that they practically do not like to attend any social events in person which indirectly makes themUse synonyms
anti social
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anti-social
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over the course of time.
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individuals
nutshell
, I would incline towards stressing the importance of playing Correct article usage
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outdoor
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games
on mobile/computers as their benefit Use synonyms
outweigh
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later
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latter
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