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The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 bar chart illustrates the value of one country's exports in different types from 2015 to 2016. The table illustrates the proportion adjustment in each type of export in 2016 differs from 2015. In sum, regarding the export earnings, petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods were higher than the others during these two years. Meanwhile, for proportion development in values, only gems and jewellery saw a decreased trend. As shown in the first chart, except for agricultural
products
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 and textiles, the other
products
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 got above 40 billion
dollar
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dollars
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 during 2015 and 2016. Most especially, those for petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods were higher in 2016 rather than in 2015. As shown in the second chart, textiles were the highest product for the percentage difference in values in 2016 compared with the others,
showed
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 15.24 per cent.
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, the lowest
products
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 for those were agricultural
products
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 even though
it
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 saw an increased change.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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