Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport, and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today's tourism industry.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays are complications that

causes

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are caused

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from

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tourism.It is undeniable that

travels

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travel

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flights

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and trips have become an essential part of our

life

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lives

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,and they led to different problems.

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these days we may see solutions for governments. One of the main aspects of the problem is that

environment

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the environment

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would have some awful changes,

such

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as unnecessary expenses of

water

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and

pollution of

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polluted

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air

due to

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airplanes’

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aeroplanes’

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motors and

water

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pollution.One of the main

reason

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reasons

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behind

that is

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lack

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the lack

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of extra money

spendings

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spending

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words

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words,

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if you are

tourist

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a tourist

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,you will not pay for residence and

for

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apply

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flights

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,you will

considering

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be considered

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apply

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a citizen.

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could lead to continuous

flights

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or might result in

water

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spendings

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spending

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. To tackle

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problem government should take action,and make some conditions for visitors,namely taxes on

flights

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to limit

amount

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the amount

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of them,and on accommodation to reduce expenses.

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,there

something

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that people

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should know.Society of tourists tend to think that they should not care about

ecology

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of other countries,so they

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have to take action and use less

water

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and do not litter surrounding.

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may be the easiest and so the best way to restrict

industry

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the industry

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of tourism. Having weighed everything mentioned

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apply

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,we may come to

conclusion

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the conclusion

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that

make

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making

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conditions for visitors

are

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the best way to solve a variety

problems

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of problems

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due to

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tourism as I mentioned before.So it would not be surprising to see some positive effects in the near future,as we may notice in some countries where those measures

already

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have already

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taken

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been taken

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.Actions must be taken urgently,

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otherwise

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otherwise,

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we will get bad results soon

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task achievement

Your essay addresses the major issues related to tourism but lacks sufficient depth and clarity. Expand more on each point with detailed examples and explanations to enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.

coherence cohesion

Work on the logical flow of your essay. Make sure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next and that all ideas are well-connected. This will make your argument more persuasive and easier to follow.

coherence cohesion

Make sure to use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas clearly, such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'In addition,' 'Therefore,' and 'As a result.' This ensures that your essay flows logically from one point to another.

coherence cohesion

You have successfully introduced and concluded your essay, making sure the main topic is clear to the reader.

task achievement

You have identified relevant issues such as environmental pollution and unnecessary expenditure in tourism, demonstrating a clear understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport, and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today's tourism industry.

Your opinion

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