Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport, and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today's tourism industry.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays are complications that
causes
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from
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tourism.It is undeniable that
travels
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,
flights
and trips have become an essential part of our
life
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,and they led to different problems.
However
these days we may see solutions for governments. One of the main aspects of the problem is that
environment
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would have some awful changes,
such
as unnecessary expenses of
water
and
pollution of
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air
due to
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motors and
water
pollution.One of the main
reason
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reasons
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behind
that is
lack
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the lack
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of extra money
spendings
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.
In other
words
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if you are
tourist
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a tourist
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,you will not pay for residence and
for
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flights
,you will
considering
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as
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a citizen.
This
could lead to continuous
flights
or might result in
water
spendings
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spending
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. To tackle
this
problem government should take action,and make some conditions for visitors,namely taxes on
flights
to limit
amount
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the amount
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of them,and on accommodation to reduce expenses.
Moreover
,there
something
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that people
also
should know.Society of tourists tend to think that they should not care about
ecology
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the ecology
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of other countries,so they
also
have to take action and use less
water
and do not litter surrounding.
This
may be the easiest and so the best way to restrict
industry
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of tourism. Having weighed everything mentioned
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,we may come to
conclusion
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the conclusion
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that
make
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conditions for visitors
are
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is
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the best way to solve a variety
problems
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of problems
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due to
tourism as I mentioned before.So it would not be surprising to see some positive effects in the near future,as we may notice in some countries where those measures
already
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taken
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.Actions must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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otherwise,
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we will get bad results soon
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the major issues related to tourism but lacks sufficient depth and clarity. Expand more on each point with detailed examples and explanations to enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Make sure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next and that all ideas are well-connected. This will make your argument more persuasive and easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
You have successfully introduced and concluded your essay, making sure the main topic is clear to the reader.
task achievement
You have identified relevant issues such as environmental pollution and unnecessary expenditure in tourism, demonstrating a clear understanding of the topic.

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