Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport, and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodations to restrict today's tourism industry.
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flights
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these days we may see solutions for governments.
One of the main aspects of the problem is that environment
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the environment
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reasons
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the lack
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a tourist
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This
could lead to continuous flights
or might result in water
spendings
.
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this
problem government should take action,and make some conditions for visitors,namely taxes on flights
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the amount
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also
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the ecology
also
have to take action and use less water
and do not litter surrounding.This
may be the easiest and so the best way to restrict industry
of tourism.
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problems
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of problems
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the major issues related to tourism but lacks sufficient depth and clarity. Expand more on each point with detailed examples and explanations to enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Make sure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next and that all ideas are well-connected. This will make your argument more persuasive and easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas clearly, such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'In addition,' 'Therefore,' and 'As a result.' This ensures that your essay flows logically from one point to another.
coherence cohesion
You have successfully introduced and concluded your essay, making sure the main topic is clear to the reader.
task achievement
You have identified relevant issues such as environmental pollution and unnecessary expenditure in tourism, demonstrating a clear understanding of the topic.
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