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Tha chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan

Tha chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan
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The given data shows the
population
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 of
Japan
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as well as
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 the percentage of the elderly
population
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 there from 1950 and
also
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 gives
prediction
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 till the year 2055. As is seen in the given diagram, the
population
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 of
Japan
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 started to decline after 2005 and after 2035 it will sharply decrease. The
population
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 over 65
years
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 will be more than 40% of the total
population
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 in the year 2055. As is shown in the bar graph,
Japan
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’s
population
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 in 1950 was only 84
million
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. The
population
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 kept on increasing without any exception and in 2005 it reached over 127
million
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 which was the highest
population
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 in
Japan
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. After 2005 the
population
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 dropped and in 2015 it was just over 125
million
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. After 20
years
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 the
population
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 will drop sharply and
finally
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 in 2055 the
population
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 of
Japan
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 would be only 89.9
million
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 which is almost the same as it was in 1950. The prediction clearly indicates that the
population
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 of
Japan
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 is surely to drop in the future. Again, the table data presents the numbers and percentages of the elderly
population
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 in
Japan
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 who are over 65
years
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 old. As is seen, the number of
such
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 older citizens in
Japan
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 was only 4.1
million
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 which was less than 5% of the total
population
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.
This
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 percentage reached 20 in 2005 and it is predicted that in the future more than one-third of the Japanese
population
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 will be over 65
years
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 old.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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