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The line graph gives information about percentage changes in total crime arrests for persons under 18 by locality, 1995-1998. Summarise the information and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph gives information about percentage changes in total crime arrests for persons under 18 by locality, 1995-1998. Summarise the information and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph describes the total crime arrested for
person
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persons
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 under 18
percentage
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per cent
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 changes locally in Panama
city
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 between 2010 and 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 burglary dropped a large statistic of
incidents
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 significantly, car theft and robbery remained almost the same throughout the given period. Looking at more detail, even though in 2010, burglary had the most total of
incidents
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, which was around 3500, it sharply declined the number of
action
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actions
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 by the year of 2015. Regarding
to
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car theft was the second figure of
incidents
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, which was just less than 3000, and fluctuated slightly, but it ended up with almost the same percentage of
incidents
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 in 2019, So did robbery but, robbery had the least number of
incidents
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 in certain years.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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