The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did the regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar graph depicts regular physical
men
and women who didAdd an article
a
the
activity
in Australia in 2010.
As an overview, men
demonstrate declined trend and women represent an increased trend but in the last
, it decreased. Moreover
, the highest physical activity
was done by the 15 to 24 age
group
of men
. While
the lowest is in the 35 to 44 men
age
group
. While
the 45 to 54 age
group
of females did the highest exercise.
The age
group
of 15 to 24 did physical activity
more than 50% which was 52.8%. However
, other age
groups are less than 50% in 2010. The lowest activity
done by the 35 to 44 age
group
which is only 39.5% as well as
65 and over age
was the second highest 46.7%.
55 to 64 age
women did the highest physical movement which is 53.3% and it was followed by the 55 to 64 age
group
which was 35%. However
, other age
groups are less than 50% in 2010 and the lowest activity
did by 65 and over 47.1%.Submitted by paramravalia24 on
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